Great 100WC Aiden I liked how you described how you were feeling and what you were doing. Maybe you could tell us why you had been waiting for years to ride a scooter and take out some of the repetitive words.

Hey Gianni,
I liked your 100WC and the all-around story but you should definitely use punctuation like full stops and commas. You should also work on your spelling because there are a lot of spelling mistakes but other than that it was a great story.

Hello Luka,
I liked your 100WC and how your sentences are very fluent and readable but maybe you could include a few things like punctuation in this sentence ”That would be a disaster if she wore that I would be embarrassed for life.” and instead of repeating ”that” twice you could say ”it” so it would be” That would be a disaster if she wore it, I would be embarrassed for life.

I loved your 100WC and how you made it scary but maybe next time you could use some more understandable names because it was hard to understand them.